Commitment
Commitment is something that is hard to keep. A sport that needs a lot of commitment is football it is a year round sport. During the off season you may think it’s just a break from the season but its not you still put full effort and full time into it. Lifting is a major factor for football it’s were you prepare for the season to come to get bigger, stronger and, faster. It doesn’t come easy to do those three things because it takes hard work and a lot of time to put in it. The only way that you will achieve these three main goals is to be committed to them and to work towards making them happen and not letting your mind tell you can’t do something. There will be plenty of times were you don’t want to lift but you go because you made that commitment to not only yourself but to a team that makes the same commitment to you.
The team is what pushes you through the times where you want to stop and quit, they are there for you. The team is there for you on the field, they all trust you because you were there in the off season everyday committed and didn’t let them down. When you think about it you are committed to more then just the off season you are committed to fifty other players. If they didn’t see you one day then they will find out why you were not there.
The focus of you paper is very good. You stayed on topic about how you have to be committed for football. The organization is okay but it could be better. You also repeat yourself often. Like one of the lessons, make your point once and make it well then shut up. The conventions, mostly comma’s you could add in the piece to break up some of your sentences.
ReplyDeleteThe focus of your paper, Jamesey was very good. You stayed on topic by continuing to talk about being committed to football. Your organization is good, but you could change it up a bit. Your theme should probably have more than two paragraphs, but this is only a rough draft so dont worry :). For conventions you could vary your sentence structure and put afew commas here and there. Gooooood jobbbb :)
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